labellementeuse | Poetry (mine)

fruity
(this one's for foxtail. Keyword: pineapple)

when i see you
and I don't know what to say
it
quavers in me
lime flavoured

when we've fought
and you walk away
and i'm left helpless

lemons.

lemonade is when
you turn around as you're leaving
and i can see you're smiling...

but when i see you
in a crisp clear morning
and i can't help smiling

that's pineapple.

*sniggers* oh well, she did ask for it.

Uhm. Also. I want to enter a poetry competition, and I kind of haven't got anything going that the moment I think is really good. or even good. Now I wrote the following this morning, and I guess I like it... but i don't know if I like it THAT much. I don't know if it's worth anything- I think it is, but... I need you all to be honest. I want/need some comments... first of all, I really liked the idea. But I don't know if it's a good one- is it trash? half of me thinks it is, a product of a couple of poems I read lately that made me laugh. But the other half isn't so negative... please help.

dance/love/dance
for MDP

This is the secret of loving
this careful elegant
confident
dance I see beginning

although they are on far sides of the room
everyone
knows what's happening

perhaps she will lead
a delicate courtesy
& he will bow/take her hand...

it is her firstdance
step on the strange floor
and she will pirouette and
arabesque
for him alone

for her he will do five thousand high kicks
and jete across the floor
forevermore

They're moving faster now
to the beat of breathing
a stomp-stamp
CLAP
to latin rhythms

they feel so good

in a full accelerando/
crescendo of li(o)ve

this is the dance-at-the-wedding
but also at the divorce
this is the messy breakup
the messier making up

we've seen it all before
we know the beats
the moves

so do they

it is implicit in our make up
it is the dance we all watch most avidly
but will not join in

we mark time
and wait

Poetry (mine)

might be the one I'm trying to get up a portfolio